The speech that you submitted to me for presentation at
[name of honoree] retirement party is excellent with one
minor exception.
A certain reference, I feel, should be deleted in certain
sections. The reference is [state references] in Paragraphs
[#] and [#]. Possibly a more suitable substitution would be
[list suggestion].
Once again, the speech is very well written. Thank you.
Very truly yours,
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